plz read the poem...n comment on it...

[banglababu]

Here is a poem i wrote...plz comment on it. thanx.

Motherland


I was born in a world of jungles, full of mazes and infusions,
I was raised in a ‘land of water’, where the river had no conclusion.
But then one day, my land of beauty went away, as I was trapped in a snare,
I was taken to another jungle, although I was quite unaware.
This “jungle of concrete” surrounded me from all sides,
Rods replaced the plants and floors replaced the ocean tides.
I was fed quite often, and was checked for any germs I had,
But one thing they did not check was why I was sad.
They did not understand, what went on deep inside my heart,
They did not know what they have silently taken apart.
My mind longed not for food – or for a good night’s sleep.
It is for my motherland, for which I silently weep.
Let these stripes of black once again fuse into the mangrove trees.
Let my eyes feast upon the wide-open seas.
Let the suns rays mingle with the orange of my coat.
Let me once again sit in a fisherman’s boat.
Let me – o please let my paw walk over the golden sand.
Let this Bengal tiger free, in his motherland.

(A. K. Rahim)

[mhnew]

A good one..

[sweetsista]

that was a really beutiful poem!
nice work brotha!
*sweetsista*

[muslima]

that was really good.